Hey Paul - the action 'rodeo' sequence really works nicely; can I assume that, when the step-ladder first animates in the shed, it's because it can hear the approach of the person?
Also - you need it to read '10 Years later...' to make better sense of the passing of time.
I think you need to reconsider your ending - or at least - the music, because your story sort of fades out - this might be because you have the stepladder galloping off into the distance, or because the music is weak and so your story needs a proper 'full stop' - both aurally, and in visual terms too.
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Hey Paul - the action 'rodeo' sequence really works nicely; can I assume that, when the step-ladder first animates in the shed, it's because it can hear the approach of the person?
Also - you need it to read '10 Years later...' to make better sense of the passing of time.
I think you need to reconsider your ending - or at least - the music, because your story sort of fades out - this might be because you have the stepladder galloping off into the distance, or because the music is weak and so your story needs a proper 'full stop' - both aurally, and in visual terms too.
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